Wednesday, 8 May 2013

Wounded - a short story

About the story
The thought was spontaneous and it occurred to me while I was half awake in the late night (on May 7, 2013). The specialty is that it took me just 20 minutes to pen this story.

Genre
Thriller

WOUNDED

'Where am I?' he muttered to himself as he wiped the sweat off his forehead. 'What's happening with me?' he again muttered to himself as he found himself lying at the corner of the bed. Something shook him up all of a sudden. He felt some voltage passing through his body that jolted him out of the bed. 'What the hell!' he muttered to himself as he looked around the room. The concrete walls of the room were painted blue and it had posters of Arnold Schwarzenegger pasted all over it. The dirty clothes were spread on the floor. The room was indeed stinking a bit. He spotted a door to his right side. He rushed to it and opened the door. The blazing sun blurred his vision for a couple of seconds. He rubbed his eyes and by the time he got his vision back, he saw a man getting up the staircase which lay to his right side. The man as he approached took out a gun and shot him twice on his chest.

'Where am I?' he muttered to himself as he wiped the sweat off his forehead. -Posters, Door, Vision blind, Gun shots- He recollected everything that happened moments ago. Suddenly he felt some voltage passing through his body which jolted him out of the bed. The wall was blue and it had the posters of Arnold Schwarzenegger on it. He spotted a door to his right side. He decided not to open it instead he peeped his head out through the window attached next to the door. He saw a man walking towards the staircase. He was not sure whether the man was the same one who shot him a couple of minutes ago. He looked around the room as his heart began to thump louder. 'Think, think, come on,' he muttered to himself. He spotted another window which lay opposite to the front door. The window was open. The man got into the staircase and was climbing up to the front door. Before the man got to him, he ran towards the window and jumped out of it. The room was located on the first floor and he landed on the road with a thud. 'Aw!' he yelled out of pain after he hit his hand on the ground. He got up and began to run away from the location. As he left, he turned back and looked at the man who was staring at him from the window. Holding his injured hand with another hand, he walked faster like a cripple. The roads were pretty much crowded and he felt something strange as everyone around were gazing their looks at him. He looked around to see that all their eyes were on him. When he turned back to follow the path, he saw the man standing before him with the gun. The man aimed the gun straight at him and shot him twice on his chest.

'Where am I?' he muttered to himself as he wiped the sweat off his forehead. He recollected the things -Posters, Door, Window, Jump, Run, Gun shots- as he looked around the blue concrete walls filled with the posters of Arnold Schwarzenegger. This time he was certain that what was going to happen to him in the next few minutes. Sitting on the floor, he looked at the table that lay to his left hand side. He approached the table and noticed the draw to be left open. He looked into it and saw a gun lying inside the draw. He took it in his hand and found that the gun to be fully loaded. Then he heard the footsteps approaching the front door. He was waiting for the man to open the door. A few seconds later, he heard a thud from the front door. He cocked the gun and aimed straight at the door. The man broke open the door and he shot a bullet into the man's abdomen. The man fell on the floor.

The beep from the ECG machine began to sound louder. 'Call the doctor immediately,' a nurse said this to a fellow nurse who was adjusting the oxygen level. A bundle of wires were fitted into the patient's body and he had an oxygen mask on his face. His body began to tremble. The doctor arrived at the room and examined the patient. 'Increase the dose of anesthesia,' the doctor said as he looked at the blood pressure monitor. 'The blood pressure is decreasing, and so is his pulse rate. This is no good,' the doctor was confused for a moment. Electric shocks were given to his body to bring back his pulse to normal.

He shot a bullet into the man's abdomen. The man fell on the floor. Suddenly he felt some voltage passing through his body which jolted him away. Holding the gun in his hand, he stepped back a bit as the man was lying opposite to him on the floor. Thinking that the man lost his consciousness, he slowly walked to him. Suddenly the man woke up and kicked his hand. The gun fell aside and before he went to pick it up, the man shot him.

The beeping sound from the ECG machine began to lower. The blood pressure and the pulse rate returned to normal. 'What's happening with him? I've never seen anything like this before,' the doctor said to the nurses. 'Shift him to the operation theater. The operation must be done as soon as possible,' the doctor left the room after saying this. The patient was immediately shifted to the operation theater and the operation began after a couple of minutes.

'Where am I?' he muttered to himself as he wiped the sweat off his forehead. He recollected getting shot by a man. 'Who is he and why is he trying to kill me?' he asked himself. He looked at the front door. 'Think of something!' he muttered to himself, 'I must grab his weapon.' He hid himself behind the door to attack the man. He was alerted by the footsteps which approached the front door. As he saw a shadow flashing on the floor, he pushed the door which in turn pushed the man a few feet behind. He got out and punched hard on the face and kicked on the chin of the man with his knee. He grabbed the gun from the man and began to run away. The man stood up rubbing his jaw and went after him.

The readings of the ECG machine were going smooth as the operation was being performed. The doctors took out one bullet from the chest of the patient. The pulse rate and the blood pressure were steady.

As he ran, he saw some blood oozing out of his shirt. He lifted his shirt up to see a hole and a bullet wound lying side by side. The blood was oozing out of the hole. Ignoring that, he began to run. The man approached him faster and hit him hard behind his head.

The pulse rate showed a slight variation. 'That happens, don't bother about that,' the doctor said and he continued with the operation. The doctor made a round incision around the patient's chest to remove the second bullet which had gone deep into the body. After struggling for minutes, he successfully removed the bullet from the body. 'Get me the stitch kit,' the doctor said to the fellow doctor who was operating along with him.

His shirt totally turned red. The man came near to him to grab the gun but he blocked him and pushed him aside. He hit hard on the man's head with the barrel of the gun. He then shot four bullets into the man's body. Seconds later, the man died.

'He started to show some improvements,' the doctor said as he stitched the operated part. 'Two bullets, he will survive it,' another doctor commented. 'What happened to the guy who shot him?' the doctor asked a fellow doctor. 'The police have him,' replied the doctor.

Holding the gun, he looked at his chest. The bleeding began to cease and the red color on the shirt began to fade. All of a sudden, he began to lose his sight. His vision blurred as everything around him appeared black and white. He felt dizzy and fainted hitting his head on the ground.

Opening his eyes, he found himself on bed in an enclosed room. The concrete walls of the room were blue colored but there weren't any Arnold Schwarzenegger on them. Constant beep sounds came out from the ECG machine that lay adjacent to him. He was not fitted with any oxygen masks and he was able to breathe free. The saline was dripping from the bottle through a lengthy tube into his body. The room was dark with just one light shining bright near the door. He then muttered to himself, 'Where am I?'

Written by Ashwin Kumar

20 comments:

  1. It was like watching a Thriller Movie :) Kick Assssssssssssss

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  2. Wow certainly a great thriller, i enjoyed reading this , thanks a lot for sharing. The man is going on and on in circles and wondering what is happening with him. He is getting shot in all the situations and he wonders what is going on. Well this is really a bouncer, good read i must say.

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    1. thanks for reading the story.. I'm glad that you enjoyed reading it ;)

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  3. Are you familiar with the very old US tv show, "The Twilight Zone?" This is like watching that very unsettling and thrilling show through your writing. Excellent.

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    1. no, i haven't heard abt the show.. anyways i am very glad that you liked the story :)
      thanks for reading

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  4. Good one..Your experiment worked..:-)



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    1. Good to see your comment Ramyasree. Glad that you liked it :)

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  5. Ashwin !!! Its so nice that i can link some imaginary drama with the reality in the story... The lines like "He felt some voltage passing thru his body" in imagination which is linked in reality as electrical shocks that doctor is insisting with also "As he ran, he saw some blood oozing out of his shirt" which is again linked with the open heart surgery wow ... So thrilled reading i like the links between neatly said and edited i loved it :-)

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    1. im equally thrilled after reading your comment. i'm very glad that you loved it :)

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  6. Wow!!!! it was amazing reading your story.. i felt the thrilling experience right from the scratch of the story and i have imagined the character, room,wall which was explained in the story.. No where in a story, i even guessed what will happen next..
    Have a great clues that soon we gonna get a good director in cine field.. All the best..!!!!

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    1. i'm excited after reading ur comment. I'm very glad that you liked the story.

      I guess I've to stick on to my writing as I'm not interested in cine field. I like to transport readers into my world through my words and that's a tougher job than making a feature film. :)

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  7. I really enjoyed this. Thrilling from beginning to end. Reliving and evolving simultaneously...Thanks for sharing it.

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  8. whoa.. this is so cool. at one point i could guess whats actually going on. but sema thrilling narration.. and i second karthiga for your chances in film industry.. way to go, Ashwin. :)

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  9. Wow! Very thrilling Ashwin. I enjoyed the read. :)

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